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Atlas shrugged
and you caught the Earth.
In the pause between breaths,
labored and pained,
you tried explaining
concepts of strength
while your bones creaked
and betrayed your bravado.

I will shoulder the world,
with you,
if you'd let me.

I've borne smaller globes
and understand the ache;
it's not to be carried alone.

And if I carry this with you,
perhaps we'd fall in step,
and roll this planet from your back
into orbit.
For a friend. :heart:
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YogaTeacher Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful concept, thoughtfully wrought. Thank you for sharing.
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading, and for such a lovely comment! :heart:
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The first two lines make such a great image and beginning. :clap:
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked. :heart:
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artin2007 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Professional General Artist
One envies the friend, for such an articulate and great offering.
It has a touch of Emily D., but w/o her pessimism... BTW the
Ayn Rand book has been remade into a new flick and is soon to be out,
if not already....but....I sense this is not about AR's themes....
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D He liked the poem very much, and it ended up helping me get up the courage to reveal how I felt about him. :heart:

No, it wasn't about Ayn Rand's themes, but the imagery that the title of the book provided sparked the poem. :heart:
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artin2007 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Professional General Artist
I hope the liaisons-to-be perhaps
are splendid.... and...belated happy holidays
and best wishes for all your undertakings in the new year!
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well done.
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I did too fall in love with this.. :heart:
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:iconcallerofcrows:
callerofcrows Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! Glad you liked it. :love:
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug::iconmypleasure:
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corajasmine Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is a really interesting poem D:
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:iconcallerofcrows:
callerofcrows Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D Glad you liked, hope that I continue to write interesting poems!
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corajasmine Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
oh i'm sure you will !! just stay inspired :)
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
God, this is so beautiful.
I'm so taken with this. :heart:
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:iconcallerofcrows:
callerofcrows Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!! It came straight from the heart, and I find that those poems draw the most people in.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yes, I should say so. :heart:
You're very welcome.
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
lovely :heart:
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:iconcallerofcrows:
callerofcrows Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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timeraider Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, certainly the sentiment is lovely, but your enjambment and pacing are also quite wonderful. It's just... a pleasure to read, in every facet.
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
D'aw! Thank you so much! :blush:
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foto-ragazza14 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012
No words for how much I love this. It's as simple as that.
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:iconcallerofcrows:
callerofcrows Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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Spalding004 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lucky friend! :heart:
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:iconcallerofcrows:
callerofcrows Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
They're definitely an amazing friend. :)
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Spalding004 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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