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We built a beautiful pyre,
and in my heart,
I'm holding your hand as it burns.
The sparks could become the stars,
jewels in Orion's belt.

I'd lace my fingers through yours
in a final act of faith
while we stare down the smoke
cradling the moon,
and each piece of kindling
that crumbles in on itself
leaves me a little less broken.

The light flickers,
so do the corners of your lips.
We needed this.
Doing a bit better each day. =)
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dweckie Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Student Writer
Really beautiful, love it :love:
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!
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Poelee Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012
Sad and lovely...When I read it through the first time, I thought of firework-sparks, falling to the ground.

I'm glad you're doing better :)
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. In my head, it's a bonfire on a beach, just out of reach of the waves. The sparks are much like firework sparks, though. Sometimes I wish I could make movies just by taking what's in my head and projecting it onto a screen. Some of my poems seem so black and white compared to what I "see" but can't write down. I'd love to direct someday, but don't know how to get to that point. :P
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Poelee Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012
Oh, I know just what you mean! It can be so hard to make flat words, no matter how nice they can be, communicate the fullness of emotion...It would be wonderful if you could somehow film thoughts. Or dreams?
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oooh, that'd be so fantastic.
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. Especially the last stanza. İ love it. Even the sad tone is working very good in this poem:dalove:
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012   Writer
This is a really powerful piece, and the last line seals it. Well done!
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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